# Dialogue Doctor - Chapter 02 - Round: Reader-Directive Sweep (2026-07-24)

Scope: full cold re-read after: banned-brands exchange expansion; "considered settled" duplicate cut; Odile warmth line added at the stair ("The good charcoal, Theo. She will know the difference."). Updated style rules applied (no narration tail-buttons; connected conversation; friendlier Odile card). Prior rounds preserved on disk.

SCENE S1 (office, Odile/Theo):
- 1-7: CLEAN - imperative vs. advocacy registers; attribution never in doubt.
- FAKE-SHARP: CLEAN - "That was the purpose of a list." licensed. New line "The good charcoal, Theo. She will know the difference." tested: it is logistics carrying regard (her card's care-through-provisioning), speakable, two sentences; plants June's eye without lampshading. Retained.
- INTERIORITY-OVERCORRECTION: CLEAN ("it still read like news").

SCENE S2 (email correspondence): non-standard form; modes 2/5 excluded per calibration. No findings.

SCENE S3 (packet pickup):
- 2: CLEAN - nontransferable-clause verification run is four distinct beats with symmetric stakes, bracketed by longer turns, converted to consequence by June ("That's a lot of rule for an evening class.").
- FAKE-SHARP: CLEAN - brand-war anecdote is mechanism and history; "They know what they did." is quoted Odile, licensed. Counter-candidate "She doesn't alphabetize people." survives as literal fact.
- 3/5: CLEAN - withhold at the receipt book stays legible ("She watched him choose the receipt book.").

Tail-strip verification: "as she did with invoices she considered settled" removed (duplicate); remaining buttons ("He had never taken the pen.", "His name had been printed on the card for three weeks.") are plot-bearing, kept. June's exit line "You're better at the rest than you should be." is the chapter's one earned scene-end quip, within cap.

OVERALL: CLEAN
