# Chapter 04 Dialogue Repair Memo

Source audit: `output/critiques/claude/chapter_04.dialogue_doctor_round1.md`

Blocking findings accepted:

1. Table-wide dry-correction monoculture.
   - Repair: changed Sam's `"Off the clock, Ruthie"` to a concrete care move: `"Pie first, Ruthie."`
   - Repair: changed Mara's repeated `"Tuesday"` enforcement to warmth-plus-reason: `"Keep it through Tuesday... I lent it in the studio. I want the studio version back"` and `"Then give me the version with bad fluorescent light."`
   - Protected: June, Luis, Ruth, Theo, Priya, and Dee's remaining clipped corrections were kept because the audit named them as card-licensed and scene-functional.

2. June's openings epigram.
   - Repair: replaced `"Openings are for standing near art so other people can see you doing it"` with more visual, less quotable specificity: `"At openings there are shoulders in front of everything. Wine in the corners. People reading labels with one eye on the door."`

Additional continuity tightening from the same audit:

- Changed Ben's line from `"The list closed in August. We were line three"` to `"The list was full in August. Priya still has the email"` so the exchange does not imply the wrong class size.
- Changed Theo's `"Line eight. Last line on the sheet"` to `"Line eight. The last blank line, somehow"` to preserve the canonical line-eight detail without overexplaining roster math.
- After Comedy Doctor round 2 referred June's `"That's the gallery voice"` to the reading guide's zero-tolerance dialogue-diagnosis rule, changed it to `"You're still at work"` so the beat names Theo's behavior mode rather than diagnosing speech.
- After Dialogue Doctor round 3, changed Mara's `"That's three words"` to `"I have fries coming"` so the beat no longer rates the form of June's answer while preserving Mara's interrogation pressure and the fries-clock comedy.

Dialogue Doctor round 4 verification: OVERALL: CLEAN.

Final mechanical gate after round-3 repair: PASS open=0, allowlisted=0, WATCH=260 across Chapters 01-04.
