All inputs read — round-1 blocker, revised chapter, packet, voice cards, reading guide, bans, manifest, and gate report. The full re-audit follows.

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# Audit: Dialogue Doctor — Chapter 13 (Round 2: repair verification)

Manifest entry: `output/chapters/chapter_13.md`, scene 01 (lines 2–191), 56 dialogue lines / 73 quoted utterances, doctor required. One scene block per manifest segmentation; loci cited by current line numbers (the file has been re-paragraphed since round 1; old loci do not map).

Mechanical gate: 0 open findings, 0 allowlisted; the `load-bearing` ban regex is clean. The 76 WATCH hits were reviewed where they touch dialogue (uncontracted "Do not" ×3 = Odile imperatives, card-defended under Rule 4's "deliberately formal/precise" carve-out; ellipses ×2 = mid-speech trail-offs at lines 95 and 165, both characters declining to finish a sentence, not portent).

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## ROUND-1 REVISION ORDER VERIFICATION

**Order 1 (scarf exchange, mode 1) — EXECUTED.** The epigram volley (`"I accept it temporarily." / "Temporarily is generous." / "I am known for it."`) is gone. Mara now runs her card register: `"That sounds like both of you." Mara touched a red-brown into her stove. "I'm not asking the next question if you don't want it."` (line 23) and `"Then keep the scarf through next week. Orange is doing things for you."` (line 27) — contracted, explanatory, the declining-to-push made visible as her own social smoothing rather than a deadpan move. June keeps the evasion (`"He gave me a fourth-floor window. I gave him a wall."`, line 21) plus one plain refusal (`"I don't."`, line 25). At most one line lands ("Orange is doing things for you," lightly), within the order's budget.

**Order 2 (echo-ratification thinning, mode 5) — EXECUTED.** `"Tomorrow." / "Tomorrow," Mara said` survives as the chapter's single echo (lines 167–169), tagged on both turns. The `"No title." / "No title."` pair is broken exactly as directed: one June line, then `Theo nodded once, just before Odile reached them.` (lines 97–99) — the close forced by Odile's approach with the roster. The `"Three?" "Two." "Two."` ladder is collapsed into Theo's usefulness offer: `"Limit the list." / "I'll send two," he said.` (lines 177–179).

**Order 3 (attribution re-paragraphing, mode 7) — EXECUTED.** All five flagged paragraphs are dissolved. The card exchange (lines 47–53) is now one speaker per paragraph and the meaning-flip is gone — the rewriter resolved it by cutting Theo's "thirty seconds" line rather than reassigning it; June's offer (`"You can ask," June said.`) is explicitly tagged and Theo's answer is behavioral (`His jar clicked softly against the shelf. The brush moved again behind her, slow once, steadier after that.`), so `That was new.` (line 55) now attaches to the offered-and-not-taken exchange itself; followable cold. The solvent exchange (lines 141–149) gives `"I have solvent downstairs."` its own paragraph in clean alternation, so `"Old jacket, Theo."` reads as the rebuttal it is. The showcase announcement (lines 81–83) now contains only one quoted speaker (Odile, tagged twice); Mara's reaction is reported sound, not quotation. The Priya rack exchange (lines 153–161) and the sidewalk negotiation (lines 171–179) are one speaker per paragraph throughout.

**Order 4 (fake-sharp, both loci) — EXECUTED.** (a) `"I overbelieved the screw."` is replaced with the plain register the order specified: `"You said the left screw sat proud." … "I made the plate crooked to match it." He looked at the panel. "I can take it down."` (lines 71–75) — over-explanation collapsing to a practical offer, Theo's card shape (`I can`), no coinage. (b) The setup–deadpan–topper riff is cut entirely; the flyer announcement is now functional: `"Flyer photos," Mara said. "For the showcase. Ten minutes. Pairs, please. The windows are still workable."` (line 111). Ben's deadpan did not survive in any form; Ben now appears in action only, which his card permits.

**Order 5 (zero-tolerance delivery caption) — EXECUTED.** `It came out too thin to survive Mara's face.` is gone, replaced by the prescribed observable behavior: `"Fine," June said. Mara kept her brush above the stove mouth, waiting.` (line 21) — the answer fails through Mara's behavior and June's expansion is prompted by it, not by narration rating her own delivery. Full-chapter sweep for substitute captions ("flat," "thin," "small," "didn't hold," "came out") on any line: every "thin" in the file is paint or the umber mark on a cuff (lines 31, 55, 141); no speech is rated anywhere. Verified clean below under the zero-tolerance sweep.

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## SCENE 01 — Week 5 studio, Marchetti Rooms (lines 2–191)

**1. VOICE CONVERGENCE: CLEAN** — covered attributions and read each speaker's turns as a column. Mara is back to explanatory warmth (lines 23–27, 165: `"I can hold the photo… Or send it tomorrow. Or crop it first. Priya wants the layout by Thursday, but I can tell her... I can say the windows went wrong."` — over-hosting, fills silence, on card); Theo runs practical-offer-before-emotional-statement (`"I can prime one panel. Same ground, clean edge. That's the easy part."` line 87; `"I'll send options. You can say no to all of them."` line 175); Odile is imperative economy; Priya is brisk directive (`"Top rack for you two. Pickup Thursday."` line 153); June is compact and visual. No two speakers share a rhythm. Strongest counter-candidate: June's `"Limit the list."` (177) against Odile's `"Subject."` (101) — both clipped imperatives, but June's is a deflection Theo immediately converts into an offer, and Odile's is roster logistics; function and surround differ, no convergence.

**2. MONOTONE Q/A RHYTHM: CLEAN** — checked the scarf exchange (19–27), the card exchange (47–55), the plate exchange (69–77), the After Class agreement (87–99), the sleeve exchange (141–149), and the sidewalk (171–179). Lengths and shapes vary inside every run; questions are sparse and answered with information. Strongest counter-candidate: `"This room," she said. "After class." / "You've never seen it after class." / "You have."` (89–93) — three short equal-weight volleys; survives because Theo's next turn breaks the shape into a longer practical line that trails off (`"…Chairs up, jars. You can..."`, 95), and the volley is statement-and-test, not Q/A ping-pong.

**3. MISSING INTERIORITY: CLEAN** — the repair cut several round-1 interiority passages (the "worse than persuasion" gloss, the "Fine was going onto a flyer" anaphora, the triple-negative kiss paragraph), so I checked specifically whether the trimming left the focalizer dark at the pressure points. It did not: the photo pressure is registered concretely (`June saw two people standing beside each other with enough air between them for either one to be cropped out.` 115; `The preview stayed lit in Mara's hand: six inches of air, June's folded arms, PARK / BRENNAN waiting on the flyer copy… Her thumb slid toward the next name on the list.` 125); the kiss carries intention, miscalculation, and duration from inside (`The kiss was supposed to be small. She had planned one public correction…` 127; `She had meant one count, two.` 129; `June nearly laughed and felt the kiss slip off-center…` 131); aftermath registers through her card's stress behavior (`She went back to her easel and found nothing there to fix.` 151). Strongest counter-candidate for darkness: the five-turn sleeve exchange (141–149) runs without interiority — survives because the turns are seconds long, the packet's post-kiss order is awkwardness-through-plainness, and June's registration arrives in the immediately following paragraph (151).

**4. QUESTIONS-AS-STATEMENTS: CLEAN** — every question checked: `"How did the handoff go?"` (19), `"Than what?"` (39), `"Do you need the card?"` (47), `"Everything okay?"` (187), plus Ruth's reported stair-rail question (107). All are genuine requests answered as asked. Strongest counter-candidate: `"Than what?"` — June pressing Odile could be a position-in-question's-clothing, but Odile answers it with information (`"Than when you liked it."`) and the exchange closes on content, not portent.

**5. FAKE-McCARTHY MINIMALISM: CLEAN** — one echo-ratification remains in the chapter (`"Tomorrow." / "Tomorrow,"` 167–169), tagged on both turns and carrying an actual granted mercy; that is the earned instance round 1 ordered preserved. Checked the other clipped runs: the sleeve exchange's flatness is aftermath texture under the reading guide's ordinary-talk exclusion (named: meals/transit/aftermath may produce flat functional lines), not performed starkness; `"Thank you." / "Mm."` (159–161) is untagged but trivially alternation-followable and functionally flat by design. Strongest counter-candidate: Theo's `"One panel. One ground."` (175) repeating June's `"One panel"` — survives because it is confirmation-plus-new-content ending in an offer, not a bare echo ratifying significance.

**6. JARGON-TRADING WITHOUT TRANSLATION: CLEAN** — craft load checked: rigger, wash, ground, dead-salmon, primer, sixteen by twenty, DECORATOR'S WHITE. Each is June's card vocabulary, established Chapter 12 material, or translated in place (`a thin gray wash, a cool middle value made from ultramarine, umber, and too much water: secondhand daylight at the bottom of four stories`, line 31). Strongest counter-candidate: `"Same ground, clean edge. That's the easy part."` (87) — "ground" untranslated in dialogue; survives because it is established shared vocabulary from the Ch12 craft note and Theo immediately glosses his own role in plain terms.

**7. ATTRIBUTION OPACITY: CLEAN** — re-walked every exchange with attributions covered. Both round-1 failures are resolved (verification above); the untagged turns that remain (`"You said the left screw sat proud."` 71; `"I have solvent downstairs."` 145; `"No title."` 97; `"Thank you." / "Mm."` 159–161) all sit in two-party alternation where content forces the assignment. Strongest counter-candidate: line 21, where Mara's action beat (`Mara kept her brush above the stove mouth, waiting.`) sits between two June quotes in June's tagged paragraph — beat-anchoring convention could momentarily suggest Mara owns `"He gave me a fourth-floor window."`, but that reading collapses in the same breath (Mara stated her own handoff — Luis's Caguas kitchen — two paragraphs earlier, so "He gave me a fourth-floor window" cannot be hers), and the paragraph opens with June's tag. Followable on first pass; survives. WATCH for the rewriter lane, not a finding: if this paragraph is ever touched again, splitting Mara's beat into its own paragraph removes the wobble at zero cost. Second candidate checked: `"Tomorrow," she said.` (167) after a paragraph mentioning Theo and Priya — "she" resolves to June because Mara's question was addressed to June and Mara then answers her; clear.

**FAKE-SHARP: CLEAN** — ran every exchange against the cut-list. The two round-1 loci are gone (verification above). New-line sweep for fresh fake-sharpness introduced by the repair: `"I made the plate crooked to match it."` (75) is plain admission, not coinage; `"I can say the windows went wrong."` (165) is Mara constructing a cover excuse in over-hosting syntax, speakable; `"Orange is doing things for you."` (27) is warm hosting, not an epigram. Strongest counter-candidates considered and spared: June's `"Don't. It looks like a room."` (77) — lands, but it is her card's precise-praise care move in five plain speakable words, delivered at a moment her card licenses judgment (Theo has just offered to take the panel down), not a zinger displacing shame; Ruth's `"Committee chairs,"` (121) — her one editorial-sharp line for the appearance, retained from round 1's endorsement, and her second line `"Absolutely not."` (137) is plain refusal, not editorial, so the one-sharp-line cap holds; Odile's count holds at the round-1 ceiling of five strong lines ("Do not punish it for being ordinary," "Than when you liked it," the Brennan/Broadway line, "Invite people you can stand for two hours," "Empty rooms flatter badly") with no sixth added — `"Subject."` and `"Acceptable."` are functional; Theo's `"I'll be here Thursday. For the joint panel, I mean. I can send sizes."` (171) arrives with self-correcting friction, the opposite of workshopped polish (Rule 8 satisfied in the right direction). The plain-speech floor holds for every principal (June 77/177, Theo 171, Mara 165, Odile throughout), and the functional-line ratio is comfortably above half (`"It's fine. Priya can crop."`, `"Wet work stays."`, `"Right."`, `"Mm."`, `"She said one."`).

**INTERIORITY-OVERCORRECTION: CLEAN** — tested rule 9 in the explaining direction on what the repair left behind. Nothing is explained twice: the kiss paragraphs state plan and sensation once each and hand off to action (the locked elbow, the brush bristles-down, the rag). Strongest counter-candidate: `That was true in the same limited way *boss* had once been true.` (191) — narration glossing June's own one-word answer could double-explain the withholding; it survives because it rates her truthfulness (a fact about her, paying off Theo's established "boss" line) rather than re-stating what the reader just watched, and the chapter then closes on object and action (phone screen-down against Theo's card, the signal, the curb), not the gloss.

**DIALOGUE-DIAGNOSIS (zero tolerance, reading guide §2/§6): CLEAN** — the round-1 hit is cut, with the prescribed behavioral replacement and no substitute caption (verified above). Full re-sweep of every narration-about-speech candidate in the revised text: `Mara kept her brush above the stove mouth, waiting` (21) — Mara's behavior, not a rating of June's delivery — pass; `She moved on before June could decide whether that was useful` (41) — usefulness of content — pass; `That was new` (55) — registers that the exchange happened at all, not its phrasing — pass; `Theo made a small sound behind June` (83) — audible sound — pass; `Mara said something pleased and low; June heard the word flyer` (83) — tone/volume and content, not craft — pass; `"Top rack," she repeated` (157) — bare fact of repetition, no characterization — pass; `That was true in the same limited way boss had once been true` (191) — truthfulness, not delivery — pass. Zero hits.

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## NEW-EDIT REGRESSION CHECK (per assignment)

Lines introduced or reshaped by the repair were checked as a group for fresh defects: the Mara scarf rewrite (23–27), the plate exchange (69–77), the trimmed kiss-pressure paragraphs (115–133), the re-paragraphed solvent/rack/sidewalk exchanges (141–179), and the stairwell offer (165). No new diagnosis, no new coinage, no opacity (one watch noted under mode 7, line 21), and the interiority trimming did not cross into over-stripping (mode 3 and rule 9 both verified against the leaner text). The cut of Theo's "thirty seconds" line slightly loosens the antecedent of `That was new.` (55), but the exchange passes the followability test cold; not a finding.

## REVISION ORDERS

None. All five round-1 orders are executed in substance and the full re-audit surfaced no new failures.

OVERALL: CLEAN
