# Editor-Not-Satisfied-Customer Scored Check - Chapter 14

goal clarity: 9/10
  evidence: Theo enters trying to perform Thursday pickup logistics after the kiss: "moved the clipboard to the far end of the table" and "He was helping."
  revision note: none.

conflict escalation: 8/10
  evidence: private incompetence -> public flyer proof -> awkward June work session -> Odile catalog instruction -> June leaves with all catalogs.
  revision note: pressure is quiet by design; keep audits alert for prose smoothing.

revelation landing: 9/10
  evidence: "He shelved for Odile sometimes. He could say that" and "Then he let go" make clear that Theo's care is now the instrument of harm.
  revision note: none.

character consistency: 9/10
  evidence: Theo overprepares sizes and bag safety; June asks for craft examples; Odile gives one practical instruction that moves the plot.
  revision note: none.

pacing: 8/10
  evidence: the opening moves through pickup/photo/June arrival quickly; the slower label browsing earns its place by producing the catalog transfer.
  revision note: no cut recommended unless Claude Positive Prose flags the public-document paragraph.

chapter close: 9/10
  evidence: "*Catalogs (9) - J. Park - out Thurs 11/19*" and "measured a third time anyway" close on logged consequence and failed control.
  revision note: none.

prose quality: 8/10
  evidence: strongest: "The third shelf had a gap in it now, a clean dustless rectangle." Weakest: "He ran the math on the way back out" risks explaining before demonstrating, but the following public-document inventory grounds it in Theo's established cognition.
  revision note: let Claude Positive/Purple/Narrator-Publicist pressure this line.

Chapter verdict: `FOUNDATION-SOUND`.
