# Codex Chapter-Card Critique Round 2

VERDICT: PASS TO DRAFTING AFTER MEDIUM PATCHES

No blocking/high findings remain. The Round 1 blockers are materially repaired: Ch 08 now has a distinct keep/destroy engine; Ch 12-13 name reciprocal memories and the `After Class` origination; Ch 16 names concrete fear objects; the scarf/fear/portrait consequences now continue through rupture; Ch 27 no longer carries all secondary payoffs.

FINDINGS

1. medium Ch 13 kiss-forcing wording risks accidental coercion.
   evidence: Ch 13 says "public cover requires a kiss" and the scene design says "Mara's camera makes refusal visible."
   why it matters: the book's care contract allows social pressure and June's compromised choice, but not a scene that feels like the cohort demands physical intimacy for a photo.
   revision order: before Ch 13 drafting packet.
   acceptance test: the card says nobody asks for a kiss; June chooses the kiss as a panicked public repair after Ruth clocks distance and the flyer photo makes the performance visible.

2. medium Ch 22 Asha recommendation needs consent.
   evidence: Ch 22 says June "declines Nia, recommends Asha" and "Asha wants opportunity."
   why it matters: June's earned-stay care move should not turn Asha into a pawn in June's self-actualization; the practical romance world needs consent and material specificity.
   revision order: before Ch 22 drafting packet.
   acceptance test: the card requires June to ask Asha first, confirm the Philly role is wanted/viable, and only then recommend her to Nia.

3. medium Ch 16 four fear objects need layer logic to avoid drafting as four separate art props.
   evidence: Ch 16 currently names "Theo's wrong-first canvas" and "Theo's truer second canvas."
   why it matters: two separate Theo canvases plus June's canvas could feel diagrammatic in one class. It will draft more naturally if Theo's wrong read is an underpainting or abandoned first pass, visible beneath or beside the truer revision.
   revision order: before Ch 16 drafting packet.
   acceptance test: the card tells the drafter whether the wrong-first image is a layer, a taped-off study, or a visible abandoned start.

4. medium Ch 27 artifact-borne truth should specify what the class can infer.
   evidence: Ch 27 says "artifact-borne fake truth" and "work reveals" but does not name the observable signal.
   why it matters: without a visible cue, drafters may fall back to group speeches or Ruth explaining the reveal.
   revision order: before Ch 27 drafting packet.
   acceptance test: the card states that the class sees two incompatible starting orientations/underpaintings and understands the relationship did not begin as it was presented, while nephew identity remains private.

CARD-SPECIFIC PATCH LIST

- Ch 13: replace "requires a kiss" with "June chooses a kiss as a panicked public repair; nobody asks for one."
- Ch 16: define Theo's wrong-first fear image as an underpainting/abandoned first pass visible in relation to the truer erased-wall image.
- Ch 22: add "June asks Asha first and confirms the Philly role is wanted/viable before recommending her."
- Ch 27: specify the visible artifact signal for the fake-start truth and forbid Ruth/group explanation.

DO NOT BREAK

- June declines Philadelphia before confession and without Theo input.
- Odile's knowledge from night one remains hidden until Ch 28.
- The class never learns Theo is Odile's nephew.
- The portrait remains consent-governed.
- Ch 13 keeps the offer as final beat only.
