# Editor-Not-Satisfied-Customer Scored Check - Chapter 05

goal clarity: 9/10
  evidence: `"LOOK AT YOUR PARTNER. DO NOT LOOK AT THE PAGE"` (lines 1-5) and `complete the blind contour` is enacted by `lifted her eyes to him` (line 57).
  revision note: none needed.

conflict escalation: 8/10
  evidence: opening pressure is scarf return/social obligation (lines 9-21); midchapter pressure becomes sanctioned sustained attention (`the card had removed every reason...`, line 79); close pressure becomes private possession (`She got as far as the bin`, line 107).
  revision note: none needed.

revelation landing: 9/10
  evidence: `"Every correction made him less present"` (line 83) and `she could probably produce that lean again next week from memory` (line 91) land the card's reveal that Theo is easier to draw when she stops correcting him into stranger.
  revision note: none needed.

character consistency: 8/10
  evidence: June uses visual exactness (`dependable edges`, line 53); Theo turns care into posture (`most legible torso`, line 49); Odile teaches through concise correction (`Sit`, line 69). Nearest miss: `The card knows what it's doing` (line 101) risks being too knowing, but it is immediately framed as June letting an awkward line stand.
  revision note: none needed.

pacing: 8/10
  evidence: longest static stretch is the blind-contour interiority from lines 77-91; it carries mark-by-mark escalation and ends in memory consequence, not stasis.
  revision note: none needed.

chapter close: 9/10
  evidence: `loop the rubber band from Sonia's twice... both drawings under her arm and Mara's scarf still on` (lines 109-111) closes on action and object state.
  revision note: none needed.

prose quality: 8/10
  evidence strongest: `the knot off-center and the tail caught under itself, and he had gotten the knot` (line 97) is premise-specific attention. Weakest: `The card had removed every reason...` (line 79) is still a little explanatory but earns its keep by setting the social excuse for looking.
  revision note: none needed.

Chapter verdict: FOUNDATION-SOUND.
