# Dialogue Doctor - Chapter 20 - Round: Reader-Directive Sweep (2026-07-24)

Scope: delta audit plus chapter-level re-check. This round's change is narration-only: the "It did not." tail cut after the notebook-angle sentence. No dialogue changed. Prior rounds preserved on disk.

Chapter-level re-verification:
- 1: CLEAN - Ruth/Sam visit keeps two registers (Ruth: "We know how to deliver a box." / "She has bowls."; Sam: coffee-bravery joke, hand-truck offer); Nia's call is column-vocabulary throughout ("That's a worse offer on every line I have a column for."); Asha's is freight-noise shorthand ("Talk fast, I'm holding a door with my whole body.").
- 2: CLEAN - the refusal call alternates June's reasons with Nia's pressure in varied lengths; the "But." beat is a single-word turn doing real work.
- 3: CLEAN - June's mind carries the decision cost ("missing a step in the dark and finding floor where she had expected it" - mechanism-stating, retained).
- 4: CLEAN - "You say that like it's evidence against the job." is challenge, answered.
- 5/6/7: CLEAN - trade terms (net-45, key money) weighted by context; attribution never lost.
- FAKE-SHARP: CLEAN - counter-candidates "Send my name because I'm qualified, not because you want to feel better." (Asha, plain boundary) and "It's the room I've got." (June, literal) survive.
- INTERIORITY-OVERCORRECTION: CLEAN.

Tail-strip verification: "It did not." cut; kept the because-clause at the swept floor (characterful, mid-sentence, allowed) and "FEB = coat." (payoff). Density within cap.

OVERALL: CLEAN
