# Editor-Not-Satisfied-Customer Scored Check - Chapter 13

goal clarity: 9/10
  evidence: "She had already checked the clothespin line twice..." and "painted the minute when knowing still mattered" establish June's goal to honor memory without theft.
  revision note: none needed.

conflict escalation: 9/10
  evidence: pressure opens with private memory-painting; escalates through "A small showcase," "Flyer photos," the kiss, then the formal offer text.
  revision note: none needed.

revelation landing: 9/10
  evidence: `After Class` lands in "`Same room,' he said. 'Two views.'" The kiss lands in "starting it had not made the next second belong to her." The offer lands in "PHL board said yes."
  revision note: none needed.

character consistency: 8/10
  evidence: Theo keeps a loaded brush off Mara's scarf during the kiss; June hides the phone rather than explain. Odile remains material and deniable.
  revision note: watch "A joint piece did not require confession" for June/narrator boundary, but it currently reads as June's social calculation.

pacing: 8/10
  evidence: longest low-stake stretch is the memory-painting sequence from lines 31-55, but it changes the panel and June's ethics of seeing almost every paragraph.
  revision note: none needed.

chapter close: 9/10
  evidence: "The signal turned green. June stepped off the curb with him, the phone dark in the bag" closes on live concealment and motion.
  revision note: none needed.

prose quality: 8/10
  evidence: strongest: "holding burnt umber clear of Mara's scarf." Weakest: "The message did not make Philadelphia larger. It made it printed" risks aphorism, but is grounded immediately by board/formal/call and keys/loading dock.
  revision note: no current blocker; let Plain Translation pressure check this line.

Chapter verdict: `FOUNDATION-SOUND`.
