# Voice Check 10 Repair Memo

Source audit: `output/critiques/claude/voice_check_10.md`

Mechanical gate after repairs: PASS, open=0, allowlisted=0, WATCH=247 for Chapters 06, 07, 08, and 10.

## Accepted Findings And Repairs

1. Chapter 07 dialogue-diagnosis silence caption:
   - Before: "moved on without a word, which from Odile was a medal."
   - Repair: "moved on."
   - Reason: the pause/action carries the beat without assigning speech value to silence.

2. Chapter 10 hedged thesis:
   - Before: "Wet paint, it turned out, was the kind of problem you could fall into."
   - Repair: sentence cut.
   - Reason: prior concrete observation already carries Theo's absorption.

3. Evaluative `, which` thinning:
   - Ch07: "which suited her" became "That suited her."
   - Ch08: "which was itself the new problem" became "That was the new problem."
   - Ch08: "Mara needed the plan ratified, which cost nothing to give" became "Ratifying Mara's plan cost nothing."
   - Ch10: "said nothing, which he took for patience" became "said nothing. He took it for patience."

4. Chapter 08 refusal-to-conclude family:
   - Before: "Theo let the count stand."
   - Repair: cut; paragraph ends on "It was the second time tonight she had done that."

5. Chapter 06 Theo coin density:
   - Cut "He was prepared to call that restraint."
   - Replaced "Nobody checked what was not listed" with concrete contact-sheet/key/message facts.

6. Chapter 10 Theo coin density:
   - Cut "Calling it early would have misunderstood the job."

7. Chapter 08 not-X-but-Y emphasis echo:
   - Before: "There was a saved seat, not a gap that happened to exist: a saved seat..."
   - Repair: "There was a saved seat inside, next to June, with Mara's folded jacket keeping it from becoming anyone else's."

8. Chapter 10 transition-formula twin:
   - Before: "The class broke up the way it did now, slowly, with plans."
   - Repair: paragraph now opens directly on Mara's concrete announcement and Priya's pen-capping action.

## Rejected Findings

None. All eight orders were accepted and executed.
