# Dialogue Doctor - Chapter 05 - Round: Reader-Directive Sweep (2026-07-24)

Scope: delta audit plus chapter-level re-check. This round's changes are narration-only: tail-zinger cuts ("She left that thought where it was.", "took its word for the time" replaced with a Ben-true double-check action, "converted all that readiness into posture" removed as duplicate of the diagram image). No dialogue lines changed. Prior full round preserved on disk; its scene verdicts re-spot-checked against current text.

Chapter-level re-verification:
- 1 Voice convergence: CLEAN - glasses exchange (Theo practical, June visual-noun praise "They're the only dependable edges you've got"), Odile's repair verdicts, Mara's two-page curation, Luis's "Move left." all distinct.
- 2 Monotone Q/A: CLEAN - longest run (repair critique) is three beats with a teaching reversal.
- 3: CLEAN - June's mind continuously present through both failed and honest attempts.
- 5: CLEAN - the new Ben beat (checks wall clock against phone, angles stool to face both) replaces a narrator quip with characterizing action; verified it does not add dialogue.
- FAKE-SHARP: CLEAN - counter-candidates "The ear is in the right borough." (June's craft-joke, speakable) and "The card knows what it's doing." (short, functional) survive.
- Remaining modes CLEAN.

Tail-strip verification: kept "The fire extinguisher had never minded being stared at." (thematic, one of two chapter buttons retained) and the chapter-final "That had not been the plan either." (earned ender, callback). Density within cap.

OVERALL: CLEAN
