# Chapter 10 Dialogue Repair Memo

Source blocker audit: `output/critiques/claude/chapter_10.dialogue_doctor_round1.md`

Verification audit: `output/critiques/claude/chapter_10.dialogue_doctor_round2.md` returned `OVERALL: CLEAN`. The clean round was promoted to the canonical path `output/critiques/claude/chapter_10.dialogue_doctor.md`; the blocker round is preserved as `chapter_10.dialogue_doctor_round1.md`.

## Accepted Findings And Repairs

1. Broken referent in the brush-grip exchange:
   - Before: "You make it look like she could set the brush down..." / "She can..."
   - Repair: "You make it look like you could set the brush down..." / "I could," June said, with an action beat.
   - Reason: direct address is speakable and removes the third-person self-reference.

2. Fake-sharp tag:
   - Before: "That's the arrangement."
   - Repair: cut and replaced with June nudging the panel straighter.
   - Reason: the quit-clause pressure stays in action rather than maxim.

3. Over-explained June correction:
   - Before: "It is the one with your name on it... It just doesn't need the label."
   - Repair: kept "It is the one with your name on it" and cut the explanatory tag.
   - Reason: the first sentence is indexical to the Week 3 portrait; the second turned it into a theme line.

4. Dialogue-diagnosis narration around Odile's silence:
   - Before: "did not comment on them, which from Odile was a comment."
   - Repair: Odile looks at the filled jars and deals the card.
   - Reason: action now carries the beat without captioning silence as speech.

5. Dialogue-diagnosis narration around Mara's question:
   - Before: "the way you ask a couple..."
   - Repair: trimmed to "Mara asked, friendly, ordinary."
   - Reason: June answering for Theo already dramatizes the couple assumption.

## Rejected Findings

None. Every Round 1 order was accepted and executed.
