# Editor-Not-Satisfied-Customer Scored Check - Chapter 15

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goal clarity: 9/10
  evidence: `"NIA—QUESTIONS"` and `"Tell me the official version"` establish June's goal: get enough real terms to evaluate the offer. Strongest counter-candidate: the catalog opening delays the call, but it carries Ch14 object pressure into the same decision room.
  revision note: none needed.

conflict escalation: 8/10
  evidence: opening pressure is logistical avoidance (`"she had run out of furniture to rearrange"`); closing pressure is a hard external deadline (`"FRI DEC 4 / NOON"` pinned under the jar). The pressure changes from making the call to living under the answer clock.
  revision note: none needed.

revelation landing: 8/10
  evidence: `"The line that interested her was true up the Vandercook. Not the wall. The press."` lands the promised revelation that leaving can be smart and still repeat avoidance. The close reprises it through `"a woman at the press who would not turn around."`
  revision note: none needed; Thought Development should still check whether this is repeated too many times.

character consistency: 9/10
  evidence: June handles fear by sorting, listing, and cleaning (`"Then she made the call station"` / `"She washed the two dishes"`); Nia names terms and money without shame (`"W-2, full-time..."`); Asha uses work shorthand (`"$32/hr, pays net-45"`); Theo stays in logistical care (`"Six pm count done"`).
  revision note: none needed.

pacing: 7/10
  evidence: longest low-shift stretch is the Nia terms block from `"Open mornings"` through `"The numbers are in range"`; it is dense but keeps changing job knowledge. Risk is brochure weight, already routed to Clarity Pass and Comedy/Plain Translation.
  revision note: none needed locally pending Claude risk audits.

chapter close: 9/10
  evidence: `"left the deadline pinned under the jar she hadn't opened"` closes on a visible decision-object and the still-unhandled umber/mineral-spirits care move, not a summary.
  revision note: none needed.

prose quality: 8/10
  evidence: strongest paragraph is the final receipt/jar action because it lets object pressure carry choice; weakest candidate is `"It was all true and none of it was wrong and the whole thing was good"` because it risks summary, but the immediately surrounding notebook list and flaw sentence keep it anchored in June's page.
  revision note: none needed pending Positive Prose / Plain Translation.

Chapter verdict: `FOUNDATION-SOUND`

REVISION ORDERS: none.
