# Chapter 05 Initial Claude Draft Assessment

Source draft: `output/drafts/claude/chapter_05.round_01.md`

## Verdict

ACCEPT AS BASE WITH LOCAL REPAIR.

The draft hits the chapter cell's required dramatic movement: June arrives with Mara's scarf, the blind-contour mechanics are legible, Theo's usefulness is converted into posture rather than errands, the drawing is ugly but specifically attentive, and June keeps it. No replacement draft is needed.

## Blocking / Required Repairs Before Integration

1. Mechanical gate blockers in the raw draft:
   - line 57 standalone `Because` fragment.
   - line 77 one-sentence paragraph cap.
   - line 83 echo-line poetics: `He held the pose. He held...`
   - line 89 echo-line poetics: `It was ugly. It was...`
2. Claude-tic repairs:
   - reduce narrator-philosopher/theme gloss at lines 11, 75, 81, and 91.
   - break over-balanced long sentences, especially lines 23, 57, 75, 79, 83, and 105.
   - reduce foregrounded `hand` language in the drawing mechanics; use line/charcoal/page/attention where possible.
3. Book-specific calibration repairs:
   - remove Mara's `beautiful` claim at line 103. It is not the prohibited beauty-unawareness trope, but the packet explicitly asked this chapter to avoid beauty dynamics.
   - avoid weather-language bleed in the old fire-extinguisher memory.
   - keep Ruth passive; the raw draft does this and should preserve it.

## Accepted Material To Preserve

- Scarf extension: Mara refuses the return without closing S-SCARF-01.
- Studio geometry: paired easels make the looking pressure concrete.
- Assignment-card subject/partner correction.
- Theo as a diagram/passport-photo helper, then Odile's correction that releases him into a person.
- The ugly drawing's specific rightness: glasses lean, collar, mouth, shoulder drift.
- Theo's own drawing catching Mara's scarf knot.
- Closing action: June keeps the new drawing with the first drawing and leaves wearing the scarf.

## Integration Plan

Use Claude round 01 as the prose base, repair the listed blockers during Codex synthesis, then run the per-chapter mechanical gate and the full audit stack on `output/chapters/chapter_05.md`.
