# Chapter 19 Dialogue Doctor Repair Memo

Source audit: `output/critiques/claude/chapter_19.dialogue_doctor.md`

The extracted Dialogue Doctor artifact returned as a summary rather than the full per-criterion format, but it identified four blocking findings. Repairs were executed before continuing to later audits.

## Executed Repairs

1. Luis verdict density / fake-sharp cluster:
   - Cut `Tonight the room has seven.`
   - Cut `This broke.`
   - Cut `Don't half do both.`
   - Kept the material observation `You blocked in her stool` and one direct order: `Move it or paint it.`
   - Added placement behavior: Luis sets jars in the sink and looks at the one stool.

2. Dialogue-diagnosis narration around Mara:
   - Replaced `the sentence she had ready come apart before it reached her mouth` with physical action: Mara sees the one stool, shifts the tray, changes hands.
   - Replaced `whatever she had been going to build did not get built` with physical action: Mara looks at the ground/stool and lowers the cup.

3. Evaluative `, which` captions:
   - Cut `which was its own kind of accuracy`.
   - Cut `which from Mara was almost frightening`.

4. Repeated `the way` syntax:
   - Recast Mara's room-entry line to `Mara entered by inventory`.
   - Recast Theo's inventory line to `The inventory steadied him`.
   - Recast later `the way` label/shape uses into plain local phrasing.

## Verification

- Post-repair targeted scan shows no `the way`, no evaluative `which`, no `sentence`/`whatever` speech-production captions, and no cut Luis lines.
- Post-repair mechanical gate: PASS open=0 allowlisted=0 WATCH=48.

## Follow-Up

Dialogue Doctor should be rerun in full required format after the remaining risk-audit repairs, because the current Claude artifact is a summary rather than a complete per-criterion audit.
