**Prior blocking issue — resolved.** The doubled focalizer mechanism (`without deciding to`, used twice on June) is gone entirely. June no longer performs any involuntary-gesture beat; the reflexive gestures now sit on Mara and Priya, and they're differentiated (see below). Verifying the current passage fresh against all nine criteria:

**SCENE 24A REPAIR:**

- **VOICE CONVERGENCE: CLEAN** — Four separable registers. June confessional-clipped ("Twice. Once for no reason. Here."); Mara managerial-directive, mid-command ("Luis, put it over by the--"); Luis monosyllabic-declarative ("There."); Priya deciding-for-you flat ("You want that."). *Skeptical note:* the semi-conscious-gesture motif recurs on two characters — Mara's "Her hands wanted a job" and Priya's "caught herself doing it." Not convergence: one is displacement after being upstaged, the other is reflexive caretaking she notices and completes. Different function, different phrasing. Non-blocking.

- **MONOTONE Q/A: CLEAN** — No question/answer volley exists. The four lines are offer → interrupted directive → one-word placement → assertion. Dialogue is load-bearing action, not ping-pong.

- **MISSING INTERIORITY: CLEAN** — June's stake is submerged but present: "Once for no reason" (over-investment), the free-indirect "a dish that came back full was a dish that got to come back" (her framing riding Mara's gesture), "June was the only one who tracked how it got there" (her lonely attentiveness = the emotional core), and the closing "It had too much milk" (accepted-but-imperfect gift). Iceberg by design, not absence.

- **QUESTIONS-AS-STATEMENTS: CLEAN** — "You want that" is genuinely declarative, not an interrogative stripped of its mark for flat-cool effect. The surrounding action earns the assertion: Priya "brought June a coffee she hadn't asked for... and set it down anyway." She's overriding, not asking. No real questions are being disguised.

- **FAKE-MCCARTHY MINIMALISM: CLEAN** — Parataxis stays concrete and fully punctuated ("dead center," "four inches," "the coats and the work"); no stripped commas or biblical cadence. "It was a dish on a table in a crowded room" isn't empty portent — it deflates the charged object precisely so the next line ("June was the only one who tracked how it got there") can snap the charge back. Functional irony.

- **JARGON-TRADING: CLEAN** — Craft terms ("checking the foot," "the kiln had starved the glaze") live in narration, not in characters one-upping each other. Each is glossed or contextualized: "the foot the way potters' friends learn to do," and "starved the glaze" cashed out by "cobalt going almost green at the rim." Atmosphere/characterization, not credential-flashing.

- **ATTRIBUTION OPACITY: CLEAN** — All four tags unambiguous. "You want that," she said → Priya is the sole female actor in her own sentence. The pronoun stack "watched her start to explain him and stop" resolves cleanly: "her" = Mara (mouth just open), "him" = Luis (just acted/spoke). No guesswork.

- **FAKE-SHARP: CLEAN** — Both aphoristic lines survive scrutiny because they're anchored to on-page action. "A dish that came back full was a dish that got to come back" is enacted in the same breath (Mara is literally filling it) and is the scene's reciprocity thesis. "He'd put the food where the traffic already was and told the room he'd done it" names a real thing the reader just watched (a four-inch move into existing traffic + "There"). Neither is a detachable quotable floating free of its referent.

- **INTERIORITY-OVERCORRECTION: CLEAN** *(closest call — flagging honestly)* — The repair did **not** re-import the old tic; there's no emotional over-narration ("she felt X that surprised her"). The interpretive glosses are social-mechanical and clipped, and the scene explicitly licenses them by making June the designated tracker. The line nearest the line is "He'd put the food where the traffic already was and told the room he'd done it," which restates ~90% of the preceding action — but it adds the interpretive frame ("told the room" = credit-taking) that is June's characterizing read, not redundancy for its own sake. Defensible as focalized judgment, one sentence, no feeling-spelled-out. Clears, but it's the one seam a stricter show-don't-tell pass could still tighten.

- **REVISION ORDERS:** none.

**OVERALL: CLEAN**
