# Chapter 24 Editor-Scored Check - Current Text

Scores use 1-5, with 5 publishable at chapter level.

- Premise execution: 5 - Artifact-borne disclosure, final Odile reveal, portrait consent/ownership, and literal first snow occur on the promised scale. Evidence: Ruth's partial read at lines 51-57, the Sept. 24 ledger at lines 117-133, the study handback at lines 141-153, and the snow/cost close at lines 157-175.
- Scene pressure: 5 - The sequence is high-load but legible after repairs: showcase -> dish/Ruth read -> storage -> portrait -> ledger -> snow. Clarity Pass round 4 returned `CLEAR-UNDER-COMPLEXITY`.
- Character agency: 5 - June turns the portrait, refuses the hidden object as a gift, tears the ledger page out, carries her own jar/portfolio, and leaves for her train. Theo restrains his explanation/carrying reflex; Odile gives proof but not absolution.
- Dialogue: 5 - Current Dialogue Doctor returned `OVERALL: CLEAN`. Strongest risk lines (`Don't hand me the thing you hid...`, `"It wasn't yours to run"`, and `"You're not carrying anything"`) are concrete, character-specific, and repaired away from therapy-speak.
- Prose specificity: 5 - The chapter remains rooted in the condition-tag label, bare-priming seam, cobalt dish, Luis's four-inch placement, Week 3 value study, Sept. 24 list, CHECK-OUT clipboard, dirty rinse-water jar, Ridgewood/Kessler/$800 cost stack, and Orchard snow.
- Ending satisfaction: 5 - Ending is emotionally satisfying but materially unrescued: Theo stops at the corner, June initiates and ends the kiss, then leaves with debt, train, jar, portfolio, and unresolved folded page.
- Continuity/payoff: 5 - Major Ch24 payoff threads are coherent: public/private truth boundary, blue dish, Priya/Ben April, Theo's study, Odile's night-one knowledge, `After Class` storage, Halloran logistics, Sam they/them, and June's money/path.

Chapter verdict: `EDITOR-SCORE 35/35 - PASS`.

REVISION ORDERS: none.
