# Chapter 23 Editor-Scored Check - Current Text

scene purpose: 10/10 — The chapter performs its card: completes `After Class`, fixes the label, follows through Theo's work boundary, advances June's material New York path, pays Priya/Ben slower-choice, and preserves portrait consent. Evidence: L21, L81-L89, L105-L115, L143, L161-L165.

character pressure: 9/10 — Theo wants to fix; June wants not to be erased; Odile presses institutional habit; Priya/Ben refuse a too-tidy lease. Evidence: Theo's four withheld fixes (L83), June's `"The helpful version costs me the room"` (L87), and Priya's condition (L109). Weakest candidate: the scene is orderly by premise, but multiple characters lose a cleaner solution.

reader clarity: 9/10 — Clarity round 2 returned CLEAR-UNDER-COMPLEXITY; optional O-4 was accepted (`taped seam`). Remaining optional "study" alias is sub-threshold.

dialogue naturalness: 9/10 — Dialogue Doctor round 4 returned CLEAN. Strongest ceiling lines are the label critique and Odile form jab, both artifact/action anchored.

specificity: 10/10 — The chapter routes romance through chair hinge, sign-out sheet, jars, umber stain, taped seam, thermal labels, blue dish, and flat files.

ending: 9/10 — The ending opens the room to the arriving cohort rather than explaining the chapter. Evidence: `"Theo went to prop the second door"` (L177). Weakest candidate: "second door" is lightly ambiguous, but Clarity marked it non-load-bearing.

Chapter verdict: `EDITOR-PASS (56/60)`.

REVISION ORDERS: none.
