# Editor-Not-Satisfied-Customer Scored Check - Chapter 16

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goal clarity: 9/10
  evidence: Theo wants to survive/control the fear assignment, opening in chair-count/flyer pressure and later asking `"Do you want me to take the catalogs back?"`.
  revision note: none needed.

conflict escalation: 9/10
  evidence: public flyer pressure escalates to wrong fear painting, June's too-accurate Theo painting, Odile's pair-hanging order, then the unsaid nephew truth.
  revision note: none needed.

revelation landing: 9/10
  evidence: `"He had painted leaving, not June's fear"` and `"the brightest light... fell on the only thing in it he hadn't done"` land both fear objects without speeches.
  revision note: none needed.

character consistency: 9/10
  evidence: Theo converts pressure into counting, keys, catalogs, layouts; June speaks short/direct under pressure; Odile gives material orders only.
  revision note: none needed.

pacing: 8/10
  evidence: front flyer pressure, long painting turn, critique-circle reveal, and supply-table delay each change the scene state. Longest density risk is the erased-wall recap, but it is necessary for the fear conversion.
  revision note: none needed.

chapter close: 9/10
  evidence: `"put Odile's keys in his pocket"` closes on action and thematic object without explanation.
  revision note: none needed.

prose quality: 8/10
  evidence: Claude Figuration/Genericization/Narrator-Publicist cleared the current text; Plain Translation found two echo orders, both executed.
  revision note: none needed.

Chapter verdict: `FOUNDATION-SOUND`.

REVISION ORDERS: none.
