# Editor-Not-Satisfied-Customer Scored Check: Chapter 02

goal clarity: 8/10
  evidence: line 25 shows Theo's goal: keep what he has not said "his to manage"; line 27 offers June the door and terms. Revision note: none needed.

conflict escalation: 8/10
  evidence: opens on missing list and line eight (lines 3-9); closes with the lie filed in binder/diary (lines 163-167). Revision note: none needed.

revelation landing: 8/10
  evidence: nontransferable wording lands at lines 65 and 75-87; Odile's hidden manipulation lands at line 47 and line 117. Revision note: none needed.

character consistency: 8/10
  evidence: Theo lists facts under pressure (line 31, line 77); June asks exact risk questions (line 75); Odile arranges through objects and imperatives (line 117, line 133). Revision note: none needed.

pacing: 7/10
  evidence: the longest no-dialogue logistics span is line 39, roughly 160 words of prep montage; it carries dates, material constraints, and language drift, so it is structurally necessary. Revision note: monitor future gap chapters; do not let supply logistics replace scene pressure.

chapter close: 8/10
  evidence: final action is record plus lock: line 165 "packets: 8 of 8 collected" and line 167 "heard it catch." Revision note: none needed.

prose quality: 8/10
  evidence: strongest paragraph line 39 (supplier/couples-pairs-partners/signage drift) is premise-specific and character-specific; weakest paragraph line 39 is dense but functional. Revision note: density accepted because the bridge must make the gap feel active.

Chapter verdict: FOUNDATION-SOUND.
