# Dialogue Doctor - Chapter 14 - Round: Reader-Directive Sweep (2026-07-24)

Scope: full cold re-read after the flyer-avoidance run gained orienting interiority ("He had looked at it eleven or twelve times... None of that was sayable at the trestle table."). Updated style rules applied. Prior rounds preserved on disk.

SCENE S1 (gallery morning, June/Theo):
- 2: CLEAN post-edit - the five-beat avoidance run now carries the focalizer's suppressed state at its center; beats remain short because avoidance is the subject, and the reader now knows it.
- 3: CLEAN - Rule 9 satisfied both directions (interiority reacts, does not restate lines).
- FAKE-SHARP: CLEAN - "Umber holds its value." / "The tape knows." are speakable in-register; counter-candidate "Show me the dead seven sometime." survives as request, not quip.
- Remaining modes CLEAN.

SCENE S2 (label talk + Odile):
- All modes CLEAN - "Labels are not apologies." licensed; her catalog loan remains warmth-in-action ("She loans nothing." / "Huh.").

SCENE S3 (catalog reading): all modes CLEAN - "*Untitled (Stove)* is a title wearing a fake mustache." retained as June's craft-joke with a concrete referent on the page; Theo's deadpan follow ("The checklist in back still files it under Stove.") keeps the exchange two-voiced.

SCENE S4 (bagging/exit): all modes CLEAN - "You're bagging them like produce." / "They're heavy. Spines crack." distinct functions; his suppressed offer is registered interiorly before the spoken "There's a bag."

OVERALL: CLEAN
