# Chapter 23 Wisdom-Dispensing Mentor-Scene Audit - Current Text

SCENE L11-L23 / L115 — elder: Odile, junior: Theo
- marker 1 perfectly calibrated anecdote: ABSENT — no anecdote; Odile gives task pressure and later submits to the form.
- marker 2 aphorism delivery: ABSENT/HUMAN — `"You met your feelings and issued a form"` (L19) is a jab at a physical clipboard, not advice.
- marker 3 graceful reception: ABSENT — Theo accepts the truth but also sets hard January terms; Odile pockets the sheet without praise.
- marker 4 everyone improved: ABSENT — Odile still corrects the clipboard one degree straighter at L115.
- marker 5 missing mess: ABSENT — mess present: self-interest (Halloran collectors), institutional habit, silence, and one-degree correction.
- MESS LEDGER: `"The Hallorans are coming tonight"` (L13), Theo's refusal of class-room disruption (L15), Odile's pocketed sheet (L23), and one-degree straighten (L115).
- Scene verdict: `HUMAN`.

SCENE L127-L149 — elder/teacher role: June, junior role: Theo on label editing
- marker 1 perfectly calibrated anecdote: ABSENT — no story from her past.
- marker 2 aphorism delivery: PARTIAL BUT HUMAN — `"It's explaining the joke before anyone tells it"` (L131) is quotable, but it is artifact critique under active revision, not life advice.
- marker 3 graceful reception: ABSENT — Theo resists twice (`"It's accurate"`, `"It doesn't say who finished which side"`).
- marker 4 everyone improved: ABSENT — the label improves; the emotional question remains private/public tension.
- marker 5 missing mess: ABSENT — the useful thing is buried in concrete label cuts and printer action.
- MESS LEDGER: rejected draft L125, June's blunt cut L131, Theo's objections L129/L147, backup copy L149.
- Scene verdict: `HUMAN`.

Chapter verdict: `MENTORS-HUMAN`.

REVISION ORDERS: none.
