# Editor-Not-Satisfied-Customer Scored Check - Chapter 17

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goal clarity: 9/10
  evidence: June explicitly wants label precedent: `"build the wall text... out of precedent instead of feeling."`
  revision note: none.

conflict escalation: 9/10
  evidence: catalog plate to acknowledgment to confrontation to repair-refusal to stopping class.
  revision note: none.

revelation landing: 9/10
  evidence: `"My sister, Eileen Brennan"` / `"Her son, Theo Brennan"` followed by June's reclassification of risk.
  revision note: none.

character consistency: 9/10
  evidence: June gets exact and leaves; Theo offers tasks before saying `"I was scared you'd stop coming."`
  revision note: none.

pacing: 8/10
  evidence: the discovery sequence uses careful procedural delay but remains under pressure from the marked catalog and back-matter turn.
  revision note: watch the first half for over-checking in later revision, but current repetition is earned by measurement shock.

chapter close: 9/10
  evidence: catalog returned, escort refused, eight catalogs outstanding, June leaves with a light tote.
  revision note: none.

prose quality: 8/10
  evidence: mechanical gate passes after small repairs; strongest high-risk lines are character speech rather than narrator maxims.
  revision note: Claude Dialogue Doctor, Comedy Doctor, Narrator-Publicist, and Plain Translation all cleared after targeted repairs.

Chapter verdict: `FOUNDATION-SOUND`.

REVISION ORDERS: none.
