# Chapter 14 Synthesis Memo

Canonical chapter: `output/chapters/chapter_14.md`

Claude base: `output/drafts/claude/chapter_14.round_01.md`

Codex parallel draft: none. Lane: single-seed + opposing critique.

## Accepted From Claude

- Scene architecture: Thursday pickup work, public flyer photo intrusion, June arrival, joint-piece sizing, label question, Odile catalog instruction, catalog browse, tote handoff, inventory failure.
- Character engine: Theo uses logistics to avoid the kiss aftermath, and the same care move transfers the dangerous catalog stack to June.
- Key story states: the flyer photo is public proof; `After Class` remains unsolved; `Winter Kitchen` appears exactly once as a catalog object; June leaves with all nine catalogs; Theo logs the checkout with return column blank.
- Dialogue base: most June/Theo practical awkwardness and Odile's "Fewer words than you are planning" survived.

## Modified From Claude

- Mechanical blockers fixed:
  - consolidated group-thread one-sentence paragraph cluster.
  - removed banned `Not the whole truth, but true`.
  - removed echo-line formulas and stock "question landed" phrasing introduced during synthesis.
- Book-specific tic fixes:
  - removed four evaluative `which` captions.
  - reduced non-dialogue em-dashes to zero in the integrated chapter.
  - cut or grounded narrator glosses: `case closed itself`, `gap charging rent`, `dressed as a logistics question`, `counterfeit thing`.
  - replaced `if he was honest about it`.
- Prose pressure adjustments:
  - made the stockroom concealment read as Theo's active withholding without the banned formula: "He shelved for Odile sometimes. He could say that."
  - after Dialogue Doctor round 1, flattened the card-size joke stack, catalog-title volley, `choose the facts` callback, and sentence-as-object narration family.
  - after Comedy Doctor round 1, stripped portable narration-layer humor: clerical face/filing idioms, phone ordinariness personification, recognitional similes, art-world critic-dinner quip, self-diagnosis epigram, preventable-thing epigram, mock-heroic brush appositive, and retired `That's the whole ___` cadence.
  - after Comedy Doctor rounds 2-6, removed remaining portable/overlay humor: June's portable label-draft cull line, Ben's generic cardstock quip, repeated interpretation/refusal captions, breath-family laugh receipt, Odile over-echo, measured-duration `Winter Kitchen` caption, paper-slip tongue simile. Proactively replaced `keep the rest where it was` and hallway place-as-agent after Comedy round 6 notes.
  - after Positive Prose round 1, stripped stock fake-dating photo judgment, dramatized the joint-piece circling in dialogue, cut stockroom/rationalization glosses, roughened label dialogue, literalized repeated `lived` figures, and flattened the tote handoff.
  - after Positive Prose rounds 2-3, localized the flyer-photo verdict, cut quiet/trait/maxim captions, made the catalog-year inventory failure visible, removed the remaining polished label maxim, reduced blank-ground personification, and replaced the final antithesis with specific failed year recall.
  - after Purple Prose, replaced the mock-epic `arrived in the world`, removed the duplicate `pencil stayed` figure, and cut the remaining blank-ground personification.
  - after Narrator-Publicist, accepted the clean verdict and also executed its out-of-scope caution by replacing `June stopped and re-aimed` with a plain action beat.
  - moved the catalog danger into public-document rationalization plus final failed inventory rather than theme explanation.

## Rejected Or Deferred Findings

- No Claude redraft requested. The raw chapter's structure and voice were strong enough; the blocking issues were localized and repairable by synthesis.
- No expansion added. The chapter's purpose is mechanism-arming and aftermath pressure, not the Week 6 discovery itself.

## Current Open Risks

- Dialogue Doctor cleared on round 2.
- Comedy Doctor latest canonical round still contains one finding on the paper-slip tongue simile; the finding has been executed in the current chapter and the gate passes afterward. No unexecuted comedy orders remain.
- Positive Prose latest canonical round contains six findings; all six have been executed in the current chapter and the gate passes afterward.
- Purple Prose contains three findings; all three have been executed in the current chapter and the gate passes afterward.
- Narrator-Publicist returned `CRITICAL-DISTANCE-HELD`; its one out-of-scope diction caution was also executed. No unexecuted audit orders remain.
- Plain-Translation returned `REGISTER-HOLDS` with zero orders after comparing Theo close-third, June/Odile dialogue, group-text, art-label language, aphorism candidates, echo families, and dialogue-diagnosis candidates against the binding register.
