# Chapter 22 Emotional-Subtitle Audit - Current Text

CLEAN - opening decision sequence. Candidate: "Then she wrote what she meant" (line 17). It survives because the meant text is printed immediately at line 19 after the failed drafts at line 15; it orients action, not emotion.

CLEAN - apology pressure. Candidate: "He touched the inside pocket of his coat, found the paper there, and took his hand out empty" (line 61) after June waits for the list. The line does not label his restraint; it stages the restraint physically.

CLEAN - June's stay declaration. Candidate: "She made herself finish" (line 91). It names effort, but does not subtitle feeling; the speech itself carries the stakes.

CLEAN - portrait reveal. Candidate: "She looked at her cup on the old coffee ring" (line 117). This avoids a caption after the week-three realization; it is a visual anchor.

CLEAN - kiss. Candidate: "His hands stayed in his pockets the whole time" (line 165). This is physical consent/staging, not "he respected her" as a subtitle.

Chapter verdict: NO-EMOTIONAL-SUBTITLE-FOUND.

REVISION ORDERS: none.
