# Claude-Tic Audit - Chapter 24 Raw Draft Round 1

Target: `output/drafts/claude/chapter_24.round_01.md`

Verdict: ACCEPT AS PROSE BASE WITH BLOCKING REPAIRS.

## Acceptance

The draft is usable as the prose base because it lands the final-chapter architecture: showcase reception through `After Class`, blue-dish return, Ruth's partial artifact reading, private portrait choice, private Odile night-one reveal, and literal first snow with June's material future still costly. June's POV is mostly right: painter-eye, dry self-correction, object custody, and refusal of public explanation.

## Blocking Issues Before Integration

1. Non-prose wrapper framing appears before the chapter heading and must be removed.
2. Raw mechanical gate fails with 19 open findings, especially comma-then constructions, echo-line poetics, mood-prop negation, and hedged reaction phrasing.
3. The Odile reveal object is underpowered in raw form: an October 20 class ledger proves pre-class knowledge, but the premise requires night-one knowledge. Integration must make the evidence explicitly opening-night dated without creating a speech.
4. The opening uses `rain`; the reading guide bans rain at emotional peaks. Replace with non-rain wet-weather texture or coat dampness.
5. Several Claude-default patterns need repair: `which` explanatory captions, `the whole of it` / `whole point`, "not X / not Y" echoes, overbalanced final-weather sentence, and a few narrator-gloss lines that summarize what the object already says.

## Nonblocking Strengths To Preserve

- The cohort read of `After Class` stays artifact-borne and partial.
- Ruth's line, "You didn't start this together," is the right scale for public truth.
- The portrait viewing remains private and governed by June's hand.
- Odile's reveal is sharp but not self-exonerating.
- The final snow is literal and cold; June still has money, train, and work problems.

## Integration Orders

Use Claude's draft as the base. Remove framing. Repair the raw gate blockers immediately. Strengthen the night-one evidence object. Preserve the final chapter's public/private sequence unless later audits find a higher-leverage structural issue.
