# Chapter 11 Dialogue Repair Memo

## Source Audit

- `output/critiques/claude/chapter_11.dialogue_doctor.md`
- Verdict: `OVERALL: BLOCKING (5 findings)`

## Repairs Applied

1. Ruth/Sam fake-sharp recap:
   - Flattened Ruth's HR line from a quotable category formulation into concrete documents: notarized letter, joint accounts, shared lease, utility bills, no paper household for HR.
   - Replaced the parallel `At the hospital...` / `At HR...` point-counterpoint with Sam's plainer `I am still angry about the chair` and Ruth's direct `You should be`.
   - Kept `Quiet cost us six hours` and the waiting-room line as the single surviving sharp turn, anchored in the literal hospital story.

2. June interiority during lease exchange:
   - Added one beat after the application terms: June squares the board, registers forty-times-rent against mid-December and Nia's unanswered thread.
   - Added one beat after `occupant`: June registers the word through groceries/four flights, keeping the lease analogy in June's material cognition.

3. Dialogue diagnosis:
   - Replaced Priya's `since you've rehearsed it` with `Let's hear the case for`.
   - Cut narration about Ruth's `particular way` of stopping before a question.
   - Removed a later nonessential `second sentence` wording from the group-chat setup to avoid diagnosis-adjacent vocabulary.

4. June line-69 explanatory doubling:
   - Cut the form-as-action explanation and kept only the mixed-gray material registration.

## Disposition

All five orders executed in `output/chapters/chapter_11.md`. Mechanical gate after repair: PASS open=0, allowlisted=0, WATCH=52.
